Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on May 29, 2013 10:01:20 GMT -5
and of course the black rose has another form thus other pics, but i can't show them now coz they will reveal the secret behind the adventure, while Sinbad himself knows nothing about it, so i guess we have to wait until he solves it first,
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Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Jul 25, 2013 7:29:32 GMT -5
MJ,First of all, i'm glad you like the chapter, and appreciate so much your review, for the language, well yeah you see, as i said it's not edited or revised so yeah there are mistakes and so,,  as for the description... i'm happy you like it,, i was afraid people consider it over-description, the dream, oh so it felt like that  that's good news,,, just great because it's exactly my intention to make it appear like a real nightmare,, the clues... well on these clues stand the whole adventure/s and if i declare any of them the coming events 'd be useless i hope you keep patience with me a little more hope you won't find it boring ,, the length of the dream, it's another reason why it's unusual, right? it's not ordinary nightmare,,, so it'll be revealed after a while  thanks again for your review,,
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Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Jul 25, 2013 9:25:31 GMT -5
@doubar,Aw!! ...... this so much for me,,, i'm honored by your words Doubs,, almost there, something like this and that's the point.. it's on them the real adventures will depend, i can't reveal any of them in time that our hero himself know nothing, and doesn't even remember it,, we have to wait for him to catch those hints, and hope he does it quickly,, yeah, i love mystery ;D you know me,, they stand for 3 complete successive and related adventures that should come after a while,, hope i can fulfill their writing and bring them for life soon, ah, that's a new idea .... but i like it,, you see what i love about our discussion >> those new ideas that come to life and if we focus we can make new fiction  but to answer you here, i saw this repetition and insistence of the same dream reflect the urgency of the situation, and the fact that he doesn't remember a thing of it each time is not intended naturally ... actually it's needed that he could remember everything and seek for explanation for everything, but it's real problem that he doesn't, and the fact of him heading to Basra and reaching for Caipra results from his self-instincts from an experienced *Sinbad* besides the coincidence played good role to enhance him to do so, lucky for him,, but you have very nice idea though, again very nice thoughts,, but you reached from it this time,,, ok, 'final' >> aye it's the final adventure or step he should go through to reach his target, and again yes there is a good temptation for the weak-spirit men and then Sinbad should prove his strength, so yeah i guess he'd learn to look past the beauty as you said, so i go for your first thought not the second, though she still the queen and a the master piece of the whole fiction too, however i believe we'll find out that this rule isn't 100%, means sometimes also the outside beauty reflect a real inner beauty as well, by the same rose too so he'll discover both types in same creature!!! i'm really glad to know that, i stopped these days naturally! but i hope to return work on it sooner,, you're very welcome,,, and don't say that honey,,, don't apology for this .. i know how busy you are, don't think like that, <3 it's me to thank you heartily for your amazing review thanks,
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Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Jul 25, 2013 9:25:52 GMT -5
@firouz,Oh, i'm thrilled to see you like it, and Bryn seemed really serious about Dermi, doesn't she? but i guess she just very confused to be frank with herself and everyone about it,,, don't forget even if they have a bond and she can feel him and so and the fact of being a witch so knows magic she still doesn't know a very important issue that he's human,,, that explains how she finds him ... unusual, she has her doubts and.. feelings! good guess Firouz i have to agree with you,,, i don't want to be so mysterious about the story, so yeah it's just as you guessed,,, thing is it wasn't convenient to any of S1 followers that complete ignorance to Caipra when the crew visited Basra,,, not even by mentioning her name or any hint...... it was furious to us and non-logic as even if the crew including the captain -which is not logic too- forget about her or to ask her about Maeve or Dimdim,,, or asking for help,,, so even Maeve's brother won't do it?!!! i highly doubt it,, and completely disagree with the show,,, they could faint connections to make things more convenient,, haha, it's not his day, i think.. but his completely out of mood,, poor Doubar! but you know i remember a scene when he was like that but the episode's events didn't give him chance to speak out his tiredness mixed with anger that result in his impatience,, the first scene of Hell House , you could see he was on edge and Firouz nearly and unintentionally scratch the ice,,, but Bryn comes to tell about Mala and then he gained his composure and interest, and coming from OUR Firouz,,, this honor to me that you see i could reach his character in a good way i'm super-glad,, well, i think it was Firouz more than me i believed he wouldn't give up a chance to tell about Thanks so much for such SO lovely review,,,,, i swear to you when i checked this morning and found it i felt very very happy and my mood was improved so much, thanks Firouz <3
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Post by Doubar on Jul 26, 2013 14:29:47 GMT -5
Yayyyyyy, a new chapter. Will read it as soon as I can, and will also reply to your reply soon.  |
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Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Oct 4, 2013 18:08:52 GMT -5
Ahhh,, new work,,, okay,, simply it's not a story,, no actions,, just some muse,, feel free to check it out, YARNS OF THE HEARTSwww.fanfiction.net/s/9738463/1/Yarns-Of-The-Hearts |
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Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Oct 4, 2013 18:09:52 GMT -5
I forget to say........ I LOVE THE COVER PIC |
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Post by Doubar on Oct 4, 2013 18:41:36 GMT -5
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Oct 5, 2013 5:59:57 GMT -5
I already read it, and left a review, too!!!! I LOVE it! You did splendid with it, really. aye of course you did,, reading and reviewing, as always *love* aww really ?! i was insecure about it but i'm very glad seeing you like it REALLY? that's awesome i found the original pic but it was kind of ... plain though,,, so i decided to play some effects on it to make it more ... alive and sensual I thought about how perfidious it is in reality -i must mention it's how we describe it in Egypt, this quote is very popular- as well as in the show and then i believed that's how Sinbad consider it, at least in his mind... on the other hand, the sea being the weirdest creature in the existence for me!!! coz as much as people warn from it, fear it,, know very well how really dangerous it is they just can't stop loving and admiring it, being attracting to it all the time, to the level they want to spend more and more time where it is! fearing it more and loving it more! and i could see that in Sinbad character in the show or even in the original story,, challenging issue and hate with time and involuntary turned into love connection and i don't think Sinbad can ever imagine his life being away from the sea,,, they become inseparable! of course this wasn't out clear in the show,, but you still can feel it... from Zen gaze, expression and reaction when he look to the sea -being alone- every now and then specially in S1, right? did you feel it? as for the review, oh, how this made my day... you have no idea you finding it that way means i succeeded in my goal i'm soooooo happy for this, i was aiming through this new fiction to only focus on the characters feelings and thoughts that they are not ready to reveal to each other,, so it's very emotional piece and these feelings should reach the reader at the same intensity the character is feeling,, that's the aim,, wow!! i have no idea it's like that....... i wrote this piece since a month and half or so but after VERY LONG PAUSE from writing. can't even remember when exactly was the last time i wrote before this!!  so all i expect that my language sure would regressed a little, so this is surprise to me! but you're way too better than me in this,,,, your vocabulary level is stunning to me always,, and there was a day i thought how those authors write things like that? i consider you as a teacher for me, coz i learned a lot from your writings -may be something i didn't tell you before - point is you're better than me in this no matter what rough time you're -temporarily- going through in writing right now,,, it's just temporary and soon enough your skills glory will back and shines over your students > me *blushes* well i already have ideas for more 7 chapters and i should mention here that the fiction will still open for whenever an idea pops in the air meaning there is no end i like to mention too that it'll be kinda related to any other fiction of AoS posted or will be posted anytime, so if a situation the characters go through during the events of a fiction seemed to be interesting or attracted me or any of the readers and they mention it, then its development will be here in this fiction but through a character POV,, as each chapter is for one specific character, meaning one situation may be developed in more than one POV (chapter)... as you can see here chapters tend to be shorter than R&R, which encourage me working on it,, but i still feel i should at least finish R & R first as it's long project and it's not funny to let the readers wait so much! you're very welcome it's really my pleasure,, my best moment to see you enjoyed it |
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Post by MJ on Oct 5, 2013 10:40:47 GMT -5
Oh squee! Thank you teti for posting that! I love those stream-of-consiousness type fics. I love getting in the heads of the characters and you describe it so well. There is just so much brewing within Sinbad that he never gives voice to. You capture his voice really well. Thanks for writing it!
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Post by Doubar on Oct 5, 2013 18:28:37 GMT -5
aww really ?! i was insecure about it but i'm very glad seeing you like it Really! And you got no reason to be insecure at all! It's a beautiful fic, and very true to the character. Yay, you used just the right effects then. The picture really glows with all those warm colours and thus fits the theme of your fic/s perfectly. Oh, that's interesting. I didn't know it was described as a beast in your country. Over here... I don't actually know. There's the old myths of the serpents of course, but the sea itself... I think it's rather described like Pirates of the Caribbean did it - "a woman, as changing and harsh and untamable as the sea". Heh, now you know where I took the idea in "How do you know?" from. ;D Anyway. But really, I can see why it's described as a beast and I must admit it does fit, too. Oh, and Sinbad definitely is tied to the seas. He's bound by fate and by will, that much is sure. I'm not sure whether I detected that look that you mentioned and which he gave the ocean, but I must admit I also never watched out for it so it could well have been there. I shall make sure to not miss it the next time I watch an ep. And you did really well with that! Because you built up a certain kind of atmosphere and granted the reader a kind of access to the character's thoughts. And with the 1st person view you made it all be even more real, even more personal. You know, 1st character writings are always rather fascinating. They demand a lot of you when you write it, because you need to be in the mood that you want to portray and you really need to sort of channel the character or else you won't capture their voice. But therefore, if well done, they can suck the reader into the story like nothing else can. Because suddenly you *are* the character and you feel and see what they feel and nothing else. There's no narrator who tells you stuff the characters themselves are oblivious to, no other person but the one who's "talking". There was a time when I almost only wrote 1st person shots, so I know how emotional the writing-process can be and how worried you are about the result. But again, you did really with it. And congrats on your first 1st person fic. Haha, really? Awesome! ;D But no, your language did not regress at all. In fact, like I said, I feel like it improved a whole lot. Aw, don't say stuff like that. I might have a slight advantage when it comes to grammar and sentence structure and stuff like that, because my mother tongue and English don't differ too much there, but apart from that I wouldn't say that I'm better than you! In fact, some of the literary pictures you drew blew my mind away, and are just the kind of stuff that I'd like to write, too, only I can never seem to come up with it. You see, my vocab's become rather small and I notice myself using the same words and phrases over and over again, just because I cannot come up with any other. Your language in contrast to that is colourful and diversified and that's something you can be really proud of! And apart from that I'd say that in the end I think you and me are much like MJ and I, or Ban and I or anyone else really. We admire certain things about the other and forget about our own values. But in the end we all simply are unique - have our strengths and our weaknesses. And we inspire each other and help each other grow. And that really is amazing, don't you agree? Woohoo, sounds like a huge project then. Awesome. ;D Ooh, now that's a lovely idea. I really like that. Oh, I know what you mean. Just too well!  At the moment, I even got that problem with the fics I'm following. Which is also the reason btw why I still haven't caught up on the latest chapter of R&R. It's easy finding time to read a short fic or chapter, but really sitting down to appreciate a longer one... that's not always all that easy, unfortunately. |
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Post by Doubar on Oct 8, 2013 11:51:01 GMT -5
@teti: YAY, finally managed to catch up with the latest chapter of R&R. Left a review on FFN of course but want to mention something here that I didn't include in the feedback: May I just say, I love how Doubar was all grumpy because of the heat and his lack of sleep? Because I cannot help but think of how I would be exactly the same. Hot weather + lack of sleep = moody Doubar. No matter which one you take - me or the original. And that just amuses me beyond telling. ;D ;D ;D |
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Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Oct 12, 2013 0:08:04 GMT -5
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Post by Doubar on Oct 12, 2013 18:25:55 GMT -5
You're welcome, sweetheart. And take your time with the responses. There's no rush. |
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Merchant at Sea
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Oct 16, 2013 9:58:54 GMT -5
Doubie,, |
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that's good news,,, just great because it's exactly my intention to make it appear like a real nightmare,, 
At the moment, I even got that problem with the fics I'm following. Which is also the reason btw why I still haven't caught up on the latest chapter of R&R. It's easy finding time to read a short fic or chapter, but really sitting down to appreciate a longer one... that's not always all that easy, unfortunately.