Eric/Deamus
Merchant at Sea
"Did you get my flowers?..."
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Dec 18, 2012 18:40:21 GMT -5
just quick reply,, P.S.: Loooool, I LOVE all those ideas about the families and such and totally don't mind them be collected in this thread. ;D ;D Still I'm somewhat contemplating creating a new thread for our families and copying all our posts into that one. It's certainly be cool to have all those family ideas compiled in one thread. *pondering*  Absolutely great idea i agree with you  well, .....  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D but me guess that this idea isn't in accord with the lovely story of Bryn/Doubar/Brea,,, unless you wanna change something, but of course as advice, please don't your world is amazing as it is right now,,, the new idea -if the same as mine- you can use it as seperate story perhaps not related to the series you create, if you like |
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Post by Firouz on Jan 12, 2013 23:00:01 GMT -5
A new chapter is up!! I R&R!!!! Here's the post! FINALLY we get to see Maeve! YEA!!! ;D Is she experiencing Sinbad and her magic as it protects the Phoenix?  I LOVE how Sinbad is still protective of his memories of Maeve even as he fears to remember them too!!!   Turok and Rumina gave themselves up to an Ancient Darkness?! Somehow I don't see them submitting like that so easily-even for power or revenge...  Such a burden for Sinbad to know it is now Turok behind the Darkness that tries to harm him and the Phoenix!  Sinbad is calling her home! For him and the Phoenix, AWESOME!!! So, and icy water was claiming Maeve or was it an icy fire??? Sinbad-burned by Ice Maeve-burned by Fire??? I HOPE Maeve is now on her way to the Phoenix and Sinbad! In the hopes that True Love will conquer all! Love it as ALWAYS TK! Stef, don't even worry about the descriptions, it might be making the 'actual' fighting and action scenes come at a slower pace, but the descriptions are also 'action-packed' as it were. You are doing and excellent job in building up the suspence here!  I can't wait to read more! POST MORE ASAP!!! Love ya, Sam
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Post by MJ on Jan 13, 2013 5:44:52 GMT -5
Firouz, thanks for telling us so quickly when she posted the new chapter! It made me immediately go and read ;D
Left the review there. It really was SO beautiful.
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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 6:24:32 GMT -5
just quick reply,, P.S.: Loooool, I LOVE all those ideas about the families and such and totally don't mind them be collected in this thread. ;D ;D Still I'm somewhat contemplating creating a new thread for our families and copying all our posts into that one. It's certainly be cool to have all those family ideas compiled in one thread. *pondering* Absolutely great idea i agree with you Hm, I shall try to find a bit of time then to copy paste all our posts into a new thread one of these days. ;D Lol, I don't know if we're thinking about the same thing. Haha, since you mentioned the resemblance with Rumina I was kinda thinking you were hinting at a Rumina/Doubar pairing.  ;D So yeah, this wouldn't go all too well with my little universe indeed. xD But now I'm actually curious as to what you were thinking about. Is it indeed this couple or something else? ^^
@ Firouz: Awww, thank you so much for the review!!! How do you manage to almost always be the first one to r&r? You're awesome!!!!!! Hehehe, I knew you guys would like that. ;D But yeah, I had this indeed planned right from the start, and for a long time I worried it would take you readers too long to reach that point. Maeve's part is essential in this, but it comes late. She's like the ace up Sinbad's sleeve and her role in this is just as important at the captain's. I am so horribly sorry though that obviously I got you all confused about the ice and the fire thing.  I was hoping I could bring it across well enough but seems I didn't do horribly well on that account? Not really, no.  What she is experiencing is, at first, only his call. And it would have been all fine - she would have answered and helped him and all would have been godd - had Turok not used this ancient spell. What she is experiencing is the effect of that one. It is like a shield that is meant to keep Sinbad from reaching her, and that shall keep her from replying to him. The spell thereby turns their own elements against them - for Sinbad it turns the waters into ice and for Maeve its the flames that threaten to devour her. So, yup that one's right: Again, I am sorry it is not described well. May I ask you - do you think it would help if I added a little part to explain how the spell works (have Turok think about it for example)? Or would it make things more clear to mention that Maeve is feeling something dark in midst the fire? I guess I didn't consider that the hint I gave with the little spell ("To turn water into ice and let fire burn who strive to let it rise") may not really be enough to clarify this. Aw, I'm glad you like that part. It's one of my own favourites in this chapter, too. Again, sorry for my writings obviously being confusing there. What I imagine there is that yes, they are summoning an ancient darkness but it is not like they are losing control. Turok's eyes may show this magic and it is something new, yes, but that power is mixing with their own and things are still in hand for them. I am sorry it came across differently to you - that you rather had the impression they were overtaken by the ancient evil. But be assured it's not meant to be like this. And I agree with you - giving themselves up to someone or something else is not really what they would do. They do overestimate themselves, yes, and their pride and arrogance are their biggest weakness, but they are still good at what they do. And it wouldn't fit the situation to make such a step indeed. (Btw.: Again, feel free to tell me if you think I should modify things and make that be more clear! <3 ) Indeed. >.< And for a moment, while writing, I was insecure whether to add that part at all. But when I had planned on this fic so many years ago I wanted it to be this way, wanted Sinbad to find out. And thus I opted for keeping it like this. Poor captain indeed! I'm not exactly friendly towards him now am I? xD ;D ;D Aye, he does. And I'm happy to see this is appreciated. ;D Well, you will find out soon. ;D To be honest, we're approaching the end of this fic. If my calculations are correct there should be about two more chapters and a little epilogue and that's that then. Wow, can't believe I got that far already! O.o Awww, thanx, sweetie, for those words!!! I was really worried about those because I know that, if you rely too much on descriptions, things can become pretty boring to read. But in this chapter almost everything is happening in sort of an inward world and describing this struggle is all I could do. I'm so happy to know that there was still some 'action' in what happened and that the chapter made for a nice read. As always, I'm extremely grateful for your input! Thanx again for r&R. *hugs* |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 6:49:00 GMT -5
@ MJ: Awwwww, thank you, dearest for reading and reviewing!!!! I know you know how much that means but still I want to tell you that it's invaluable to me to have you guys' input on my work. *big hugs* Aw, and yeah, sorry for not posting the link to the new chapter here. ^^; I shall make sure not to forget about it again with the next one. *makes mental note* So, as for your lovely review... *squee* Yippieh!!!!! So it did come across? That's so very awesome!!!! I was worried things were too confusing and not clear enough, that I was painting a somewhat 'blurred' picture that is too hard to understand. But you just summed it up perfectly well. This is exactly what is happening there, and I actually love the way in which you describe it with your own words. Ehi, and yep, you're going to find out in the next chapter. ^^ Aww, thank you for such lovely words!! I am happy I made you see something beautiful because I see it, too. And I was trying hard to share this vision, to describe what I see happening there. And now I'm so glad to hear that obviously I succeeded in doing this. No, I'm afraid I don't. But I'd be happy to hear about it. I know, and I don't think you're nitpicking at all. I know that the last couple of chapters have been slow in pace and that, were this an actual ep, they would have been covered in - let's say - 10 minutes maybe, if at all (the talk with Chiara might have taken a couple of minutes, granted, but the last three chapters surely would have made just five minutes in total *fail xD * ). But I wouldn't know how to avoid this in the current fic as I decided to stick with the plot I invented back when I was in my late teens. For future stories however I will make sure to create a storyline that does not rely so heavily on stuff like this, and which will allow a better and more balanced pace to be realized. Once more, thank you to you as well, my dear!!! With each chapter, again, I am overwhelmed by the support I get. I never, never, thought I would get this far with my story (heh, I am sure my teenage self would be quite proud of me ^^ ... well, either that or shocked because it took me so long xP) and I owe this all to you guys. You are the reason why I continued writing after my huge writer's block and why I want every chapter to be as good as possible. |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 12:22:23 GMT -5
*iz back from ff.net* All my stars, five reviews in only one day.  My gosh, that is amazing!!!!! @ Teti: Thank you soooooooo much for taking the time as well to read and review. You have no idea what it means to me. Oh my gosh, and your review really honours me. I'm so happy you enjoyed the read, and that it even counts to your favourite chapters comes as a huge relief to me. Aww, I was hoping I would be able to make it stand out somewhat. He is relying on her and trusting her more than he ever would trust himself, and that's what I wanted to convey. Sooo happy you liked this line. Yeah, that's what I figured she would do. I see Maeve as someone who cares more about others than she does about herself. If someone she loves is in need of her help she will do all she can to lend them her aid. Not exclusively, but especially Sinbad and Dermott of course I think are those she would readily risk even her own life for. Yayyyyy, it's great to know you like this. Maeve had always had a special way with animals and nature, and I liked the idea of this skill being a bit more developed now that she spent two years training again. And since the realm they are trapped in is not just some island but somewhat detached from this world I reckoned nature there would talk differently, use another language if I may say so. I decided it wouldn't hurt to include this and I am super happy to see this confirmed by your words. Aww, and so sorry for having ended this chapter with such mean cliff-hanger. I shall try and finish the next one as soon as I can. ^^ Once again, thank you SO much for reading and reviewing. I know just how busy you are so that means an extra lot! |
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Post by MJ on Jan 13, 2013 12:34:46 GMT -5
About the shapeshifter story: I forgot most of it but it comes down to this: the shapeshifter is cursed and for him and his love to be together she has to physically hold on to him while he changes into all kinds of different shapes. So he changes into all kinds of scary and strong animals but no matter what she holds on and even when he turns into fire and burns her, she holds on because she loves him and knows he loves her and eventually the time is up and he turns into a human and... some more stuff happens that I forgot... No no no, not *fail* at all! YOU are writing YOUR story the way YOU want it. And thank goodness it doesn't resemble an episode because then we'd have to be treated to some baaad CGI monsters any second now. Unless of course you feel an urgent need to include an obviously out of scale spider dropping in from the ceiling... All I'm saying is that I have a little trouble getting into the chapters... maybe you could experiment with some attention grabbing stuff to shake up your readers some. Just as a really bad example: Maeve's walking around the pretty grassy place, being all glittery and wondering what's up with that and then abruptly turns to run back to Dim-Dim and walks straight into a tree. So as I said, that's a bad example but it's just meant to show you can shake things up a bit without compromising the story. Admittedly that would wreack havoc with the whole dreamy-style you've got going so I don't know if it is a good idea to try and shake it up... That's for you to decide. I'm just trying to think with you, give you some suggestions but only you know what feels right. It certainly did come across! And now you know why my stories are always so short. While you take the time to paint this beautiful and moving picture, complete with feelings and nuances and everything my style is more: And then stuff happened! Also, they all walked into a tree. The end ;D (this is not a derogatory comment towards myself, we have different styles, this is a good thing!) |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 14:57:19 GMT -5
Good grief, that shapeshifter story sounds so beautiful!!!! And I see now why the content of this chapter reminded you of it. Indeed, it's a little bit like this isn't it? With Maeve kind of holding on to Sinbad even though it hurts and is dangerous. Thank you for giving this summary, dear. It sounds like a truly awesome story! No no no, not *fail* at all! YOU are writing YOUR story the way YOU want it. And thank goodness it doesn't resemble an episode because then we'd have to be treated to some baaad CGI monsters any second now. Unless of course you feel an urgent need to include an obviously out of scale spider dropping in from the ceiling... Haaahaha, now I feel tempted to have some really bad CGI monster appear all of a sudden in order to give it the real AoS atmosphere (just joking of course x). ;D Nha, I do get your point and I thank you for voicing it out. Indeed the pace of a story does not decide of its worth. Some like fictions to be fast-paced and some like it to be slower. And it is on us, as the authors, to decide what we feel most comfortable with. I know that writing slow-paced scenes and stories is easier for me as I'm not all that good in the action department. However, I want to improve in just that one so I might well make sure my next story is of a plot that will allow this more than the one of "The Rise" does.  That sounds like a great advice. Thank you, dear! However, I don't think there's much room left for the shaking up because, as I mentioned to Rongs already, we're approaching the end of the fic. And well, even though so many years have passed in between and even though I could surely cook up some more cool stuff with what I have till now I decided to honour the ideas I had back as a teen and finish the story just as I planned to back then. Which again means there's not all too much opportunity anymore to shake things up but I will certainly keep this in mind for any future works. So if you ever happen to read about anyone walking into a tree in any of my stories, you can be sure that you will be credited in the A/N at the end. ;D And I thank you a whole lot for your suggestions. *lies on the floor laughing* Haaaahahaaa. They all walked into a tree!!! That mental picture is gonna amuse me for the rest of this day. ;D ;D ;D But I know what you mean. It's also what makes your stories so fascinating. Because with skipping all the stuff that happened before and which lead to this, you get straight on to the important stuff and share that with your readers. *likes* ;D And don't worry, I didn't take this as such. |
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Post by MJ on Jan 13, 2013 15:03:20 GMT -5
You know what I just thought: You are exactly the opposite of an internet predator! You're a beautiful young woman pretending to be an old, fat man. I know this has nothing to do with your fic, it just had me laughing out loud all of a sudden.
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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 15:09:28 GMT -5
You know what I just thought: You are exactly the opposite of an internet predator! You're a beautiful young woman pretending to be an old, fat man. I know this has nothing to do with your fic, it just had me laughing out loud all of a sudden.  ... Bwaaahaha!!!! You're right! I never thought of it that way.  |
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Post by Firouz on Jan 13, 2013 19:59:49 GMT -5
Whilst I was anxiously awaiting her return to the story it wasn't so long out of reach because she was always kind of in the background of this fic. It was like an echo of her was there the entire time...especially when you think of your other fic, I can't recall the name, where Maeve gives Sinbad her power/magic before this story.
Nah, I kind of liked the twists and hidden parts to this. It was making me ask questions about the fic on whether or not this was happening or that was happening.
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Post by banmaixanh on Jan 14, 2013 0:42:36 GMT -5
You know what I just thought: You are exactly the opposite of an internet predator! You're a beautiful young woman pretending to be an old, fat man. I know this has nothing to do with your fic, it just had me laughing out loud all of a sudden. I've crossed here a little and notice your point. I couldn't stop myself from laughing. You can't imagine how hard for me at the first time I saw her pic. Gosh, I didn't know what should I call her. When I typed her nickname down I stopped immediately and thought to myself "Well, something isn't right." I sat in front of my laptop, laughed and thought for a while until I decided to called her Doubar as I use to do. And until now I still feel odd. Hehe. ;D ;D ;D @doubar: Next time, if you post any pics of yours you should use account Mala to do so. I'll feel more comfortable to talk to you. Even I love to call you Doubar but in this situation Mala will be the more suitable choice. ;D ;D |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 14, 2013 12:02:46 GMT -5
Whilst I was anxiously awaiting her return to the story it wasn't so long out of reach because she was always kind of in the background of this fic. It was like an echo of her was there the entire time...especially when you think of your other fic, I can't recall the name, where Maeve gives Sinbad her power/magic before this story. Ooh, good to know I mentioned her often enough so that she wasn't really absent from the fic. What you described - with sort of an echo being there of her always - that's just what I hoped to create and I'm super happy to hear this obviously worked. Aw, so it didn't bother you? That's great to hear! Because as nice as a little mystery can be, a fic should never get too confusing. You'll see, you'll see. ^^ Aw, okay, thanx. So I'll leave it as it is. Haha, and you know, I actually had this idea, too - that it could be quite interesting if the usage of the spell brought quite some problems about for our two villains. ;D xD xD xD Epic you say though... honestly don't know yet. x) The whole fic as it were at the beginning was never meant to be so close to being epic, it just kinda evolved while writing (which is interesting because I was still sticking to the original plotline) and I guess it'll be like that for the ending, too. It might turn out a bit epic, or it might be... well... just an ending. Really have no idea yet. xD Awesome. ;D ;D ;D @ Ban: Haaaaahaha, oh my. I guess I never figured this would be so odd for others. ;D Though, admittedly, it was weird for me, too, at the beginning. But after four years of being "Doubar" I've gotten so used to that name - I guess you could call me like that out on the street and I would turn around to answer. LOL! xD But I shall make sure to use my Mala account when next I post any photos. ;D |
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Post by banmaixanh on Jan 24, 2013 9:14:32 GMT -5
@doubar: ;D ;D ;D ************* I read the new chapter already. It’s really great. I like the first part of this chapter, it’s so quiet, calm, full of magical. I like this sentence a lot. “ Like a blanket wrapped around a shivering body it covered the island, dancing on her own skin as if she were something curious that was worth its attention.” It makes the little island looks so beautiful in the light of the red moon. I totally forgot that we were in the middle of the war when I read this part. The idea of Sinbad calmed himself and the phoenix down by releasing the memory of Maeve, it’s very sweet and sad too. What I like the most in this chapter is your description about Maeve and her reaction toward the call of Sinbad. It is so soft and full of love. She couldn’t leave him alone even the pain she had to feel was unbearable. “There was no choice to make” I like this sentence. And it wasn’t what I expected to happen. Really, I didn’t think the whole story would turn to this path. You really have ability of doing the things I can’t predict. It is really a surprise to see Maeve be bunt with the fire when she just answered the call of Sinbad. I’m not surprised when Sinbad had problem with the cold. The spell of Turok did something to him, when I read the sentence that what he touched wasn’t her warm I finally understood. But really, Maeve was bunt by the fire is a big surprise for me. But everything has its reason, right? I wait for the next chapter to see what will happen with the fire and the ice. But, just a little curious, will the fire bring Maeve back? Don’t reply if you see it will destroy your story. I can wait for the next chapters to see. A little about my idea in my newest story, it is about a fire too. But actually, our ideas aren’t exactly the same because of course we’re two different people and working on two different stories. Your idea is about the fire and the water the same time, my idea focuses on the fire only. But the same thing happen to the stories is the fire was at first created by the dark. It was support to be the dead fire. In your story, it is the impact of Turok’s spell. In my story, it is Rumina’s magic. In your story, Maeve was bunt when Sinbad’s life was in danger. In my story, the fire called for Maeve at the moment Sinbad faced the death. In both stories, Sinbad called Maeve at the most dangerous moment in his life, when he was surrounding by the darkness. As I said, the ideas are not exactly the same but really, in the way we write it, there are a lot of things which are similar.  Btw, I think I owe you some replies here. I promise I'll reply soon. |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 26, 2013 14:30:49 GMT -5
@ban: Awwwww, thanx for the lovely review!!!! It means a whole lot to me that even though you're busy not only with work but also your own stories you took the time to read and review the new chapter. *hugs* Whee, and so you like it? That's GREAT! I'm so glad you like this part! I enjoyed a lot writing it. It is such a nice contrast to what is happening on Aijakar. And the image I had in mind was such a calm and peaceful one, with the moonlight so pure and yet so distant there. I really am more than happy I could describe it well and make you forget about the battle for a moment there! Oh, and thank you for your words about the phoenix and the release of Sinbad's memories, and for what you said about Maeve's part in the second half of the chapter. Though it might be a mean thing to say, but I'm actually rather proud I managed to come up with something that was not expected. I feel I often am too predictable, not only as a person but also as a writer. So knowing I am able to surprise you every now and then is invaluable to me. ^^ But indeed, this that drives Maeve is her love. It makes her wish to help him although she does not know the consequences of this deed. Oh, and concerning her feeling the fire... that is in fact also thanx to Turok's and Rumina's spell. Things would certainly have been different without the darkness intervening. Both, the icy cold and the burning fires are meant to keep Sinbad and Maeve away from kindling this that the phoenix needs. But both are willing to walk through the darkness for the sake of this world and those they love (ah, I'm a hopeless romantic I know xD ). Ooh, I fear you will indeed have to be patient. Wow, and thanx so much for the info on your ideas and your story! They are absolutely AMAZING! And really, I feel like they're so very different from each other. I mean, sure, you have a fire in both and in both Sinbad calls for Maeve... but really, the rest is completely different! The similarities are just superficial while the important parts of the plot are nothing alike at all. Aw, and take your time with replying. I still owe you a whole lot of replies in the welcome chat as well I think. xD |
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P.S.: Loooool, I LOVE all those ideas about the families and such and totally don't mind them be collected in this thread. ;D ;D Still I'm somewhat contemplating creating a new thread for our families and copying all our posts into that one. It's certainly be cool to have all those family ideas compiled in one thread. *pondering* 
I was hoping I could bring it across well enough but seems I didn't do horribly well on that account? 
What she is experiencing is, at first, only his call. And it would have been all fine - she would have answered and helped him and all would have been godd - had Turok not used this ancient spell. What she is experiencing is the effect of that one. It is like a shield that is meant to keep Sinbad from reaching her, and that shall keep her from replying to him. 
