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Post by Doubar on Jan 13, 2013 5:43:36 GMT -5
Thanks for the review Doubs, I know how busy you are  You're most welcome, dear. It always is a pleasure to read your works.  Lol! True that! xD Even though, they don't really need hand to hand combat to fry each other. *snortgiggles* Aw, but what a nice realization of that bit of psychology here.  Indeed it seems reasonable. Either they all go insane over each other or they bond, the latter being even easier here since they got a common enemy. Yeah, the poor one indeed is the less defined out of the three. She's been there in one ep only, and she was rather young, too, so you would have to assume she developed more than Maeve or Bryn would for example over the same course of time (unless something grave happened that enforced a big change in personality). And in this regard it seems totally sensible to me that she is more mature now and less shy - all the more since, yes, Caipra for sure would have helped her have some faith in herself and her powers. Nice thinking there. Aye, the young usually are the ones who are restless and I can well imagine that at some point even patient and calm Serendib would grow tired of Rumina's and Maeve's endless bickerings. x) Awww, that is so true indeed. And I really loved that move. It showed that Rumina is in fact not just an evil sorceress. She is a sister and daughter, too, and she IS capable of love even though she may never admit it openly. Really a sweet POV on our favourite dark sorceress. Haha, nha, it's good you're thinking about stuff like this. Makes a fic be more detailed and thus more alive. And the colours are really fitting! If I remember correctly, Serendib had a blueish colour anyway, or at least it's a purple/blue beam of magic that comes to mind when I think of her and Maeve's fight against Rumina in "The City of Mist". Once again, you're most welcome. And thanx for sharing and writing, dear! |
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Post by MJ on Jan 27, 2013 4:51:45 GMT -5
And another one: www.fanfiction.net/s/8950502/1/HawkI called it 'Hawk' but if anyone can think of a better title, this one is kind of sucky. Firouz helped me out on this one. For which I am very gratefull! |
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Post by Doubar on Jan 27, 2013 14:54:49 GMT -5
Just read and reviewed. Really liked it. It's very funny but also meaningful. Only thing I noticed is that sometimes it's hard to make out when one scene ends and the new one is beginning. So if you added some breaks or signs between the different scenes this would be awesome. |
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Post by MJ on Jan 27, 2013 15:28:05 GMT -5
Aw bugger, it swallowed my break signs again? I used the usual = signs but ffn swallows the most random signs these days. I was just grateful it allowed the telepathy *s. Can I edit while it's uploaded or do I need to alter the signs and upload again? Edited to add: There's lines now. I've added them, *Beams with pride* Doubar wrote: Hurrah! It worked! I wasn't sure if it would, if it wasn't too obvious from the start. I thought it would be very funny if Dermott would treat it like a big joke and drop hints like attacking Sinbad like the first time they met and having Bryn hand him Maeve's glove, but in giving those hints I feared I would give up the game too soon. Glad to see it was a surprise! I had two images in my head when I started this fic, one was Maeve as a hawk and one was the crew as circusperformers. I have three different scenarios of Maeve as hawk on my computer but none of them allowed for crew as circus and for some reason that was essential. Even thought I barely used it- going for the 'it's never going to happen!'/'it happened' gag instead, just the mental image that it would give everyone was enough for me. Idem with the rampaging animals. I was sooo not going to write that one out, too much work but the idea that all the animals would take up their proverbial arms against a bunch of guards was just great ;D Giving credit where credit is due: It was Firouz/Anime Princess who told me that the story needed an emotional reaction from the crew who all thought Dermott was just a hawk and especially from Bryn who is confronted with being a replacement once again. So I took up the challenge and wrote the Bryn/Sinbad conversation and stuck it after the Maeve/Sinbad conversation. Because tonally that was the only place it could go without disrupting the story. And for me it is sort of important to get highs and lows in the story, to be completely silly but be completely honest as well. Like when Sinbad woke up at Caipra's from this big life-changing moment in his life and the first thing he sees is Dermott playing 'scare the chicken' because even while big life-changing moments are taking place, life just goes one for everyone else. I'm glad that you like it, because that is an important aspect of my writing, well to me in any case. Like in- which one was it? One of mine where Dim-Dim's pulled Maeve out and she's angry and demanding and explanation... Oh! It's The Master and The Apprentice, well in there she's angry and demanding an explanation and... well she's also dripping-wet. Because that's just life. And I just love the idea of soulmates. I love how you're exploring the imagery of it in Phoenix and I loved exploring it for myself here. I love making the words jar something inside me (and hopefully inside my readers) that even though you can't explain it completely, they still get it, the beauty of it, the brightness and openness. And that it doesn't mean they will never have problems between them and it doesn't mean they don't have to articulate their feelings and it doesn't mean they will never miscommunicate or lash out at each other or hurt each other because they're human and that's part of it, but it does mean they are so connected that they will be patient and work through it together. They are interwoven and would not be happy without the other. So in that way I would have to disagree with your statement that he is the key, I think their acceptance of the other in their lives is the key, that is how they connected. Thank you for reviewing Doubs, you know how much it means  |
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Post by Firouz on Jan 27, 2013 17:05:11 GMT -5
r&r too!
I'm glad I was able to help!
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Post by MJ on Jan 28, 2013 2:23:04 GMT -5
Glad you liked the ending Firouz! I like to keep it open, like something new can happen to them any moment And as you can see above, Doubs agrees with your note that eventuated into the Bryn/Sinbad convo. So you've been invaluable to me. Thanks! ;D |
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Post by MJ on Jan 28, 2013 11:15:43 GMT -5
Maevezanar wrote:
Awww thanks! And I do know why her soul turned hawk: Because it was convenient for my story ;D Though it would've been fun to if she was like a ghost and had to rattle furniture and walk through people to get noticed!
And I love giving the crew some fun lines. Especially Firouz because he can say anything and as long as he packs it within enough science-babble no one will protest ;D
Thanks for the review!
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Post by Doubar on Jan 28, 2013 13:33:22 GMT -5
MJ: Yay you!! I know ffnet can be a real pain when it comes to break signs. Believe me, I have my own history of going insane over these! >.< Aye, it did. ;D Though I must admit that maybe I was kind of totally focused on the ladyfriend-thing anyway because I have long been thinking about the What-If Dermott would actually turn out to be happy with his state of existance and find a lovely hawk-lady and stay what he is even if he were offered the choice to turn back into a human. So when I read those first lines of your story I automatically thought: "Aw, no, MJ beat me to it!". LOL. ;D But fun aside, yup, it was a surprise. Haaahaha, yeah, both images were awesome. ;D Soo funny. ;D And never worry about the "It's never going to happen! / it happened!" gag. It was really enough to read about it being supposed to have happened. ;D Aww, often enough, great ideas come from such challenges. So thanx to dear Firouz then for prompting you to include such a scene. Ot fit wonderfully! And considering the antagonising moments of the fic - beauty and profanity next to each other... that's right indeed. Life often simply works like that and it's interesting to see it included in fics. Me, too (as you have guessed already I think ;D ). And thanx again for your lovely words about the Phoenix.
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Post by MJ on Jan 30, 2013 10:46:54 GMT -5
Teti! Thanks so much for your review! Seriously, I feel like I get the bestest reviews in the whole world. What was the reason you knew? Did I tell you at one point? I have a bad memory, I only retain useless knowledge Yeah, Firouz is great and doesn't get enough love and recognition. Love your list! I think I might have been hungry myself when I wrote that But yeah you can just see the wheels in Doubar's head turning: Hawk male+ Hawk female= hawk eggs. Hawk eggs+heat= hawk omelet. nom nom nom. I think he does pet her though, just doesn't want anyone else to do it ;D And it HAD to be Firouz! No one else could say anything about mammalian features like those That was one of my favourite bits too! I tend to imagine Dermott being up to no good in all kinds of ways only the crew never notices because they think he's just a bird ;D It probably would be more interesting story-wise if Bryn and Maeve really didn't get along, but I always figured they'd get along fine. They're different enough that they won't annoy each other too much but similar enough to well also not annoy each other too much. heh, the boys had better watch out when those two start really working together! Thanks for reviewing Teti! It feels like getting a hug all the way from Egypt! |
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Feb 1, 2013 6:19:54 GMT -5
Teti! Thanks so much for your review! Seriously, I feel like I get the best reviews in the whole world. you're very welcome but your story is really good as well as your ideas, so what you expect ? of course it should gain fans no honey you didn't ;D ;D ;D ;D don't worry yo never told me about your fantastic ideas before so it still has its surprising effect on me after all,,, but point is ........ ;D ;D well i got the same idea before and it returns to invade me few days before your post,,, not that there will be 2 hawks and your story,, no, it was Maeve transforming into hawk BUT .......... by another process or phenomena,,, i mean another reason and another story different from yours,, hahahaaaaaa i felt really surprised while reading your story coz in the night before i see it my idea invaded me again , i was trying to make reasonable then i find yours and once i learn there are 2 hawks it's not strange that 'Maeve being one'- idea not jumping into me it was easy as i was already thinking of her being one,,,, but again ........ even i wasn't thinking of it, who might be the other hawk ? it should be her ;D ;D ;D just the one should work his imagination a little when reading a story,,,, you have to try knowing how the author thinking and feeling to get the right impression,,, and what exactly he meant by this or that,,, yeah poor scientist  he should have more attention i love him so much and love -actually- any scientist being in any show or movie ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D tell me did you watch Anwar in the new Sinbad series ? ;D ;D ;D really ? ;D ;D HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D that's really priceless ......... yeah i think when the one is hungry he could imagine even more than this >>> it creates fantasies ;D ;D ;D and about Doubar , well it's so normal to get this little calculation ;D ;D ;D but it attracts me how he focused on the whole over thought rather than anything else,,,, so yeah he himself was hungry as well in this exact moment ;D ;D ;D guess it too ;D ;D yeah who else can ? ;D ;D but it impressed me how he also not reaching for biological explanation but psychological one as well when he turned to her not like to get orders and having boss so it's better not to pet her head ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D HE IS GENIUS ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D yup guess it too,, but you know i get the feeling that in season 2 Sinbad -especially him- took him more serious than in S1,,, sometimes i feel he consider him like a normal crew member, you know. and you have no ideas how this idea of yours cause me laughed,, ;D ;D ;D ;D yeah that's exactly my opinion as well,, i always believed in that and you sum it well, however yup i'm quite interested in stories that get them not very friendly to each other,,, unfortunately those fictions -i guess- never being completed  i just wanna or focusing more on Maeve & Sinbad reactions especially how they 'll end up with everything,,, do you wanna tell you my favorites among those kinda fictions ? oh, i like to discuss those issues always ,, you're so welcome again my sweet i really enjoyed it and oh yeah ... me sending so many hugs from here in Egypt |
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Post by MJ on Feb 2, 2013 16:33:19 GMT -5
Oh that is interesting! I want to hear more about this idea of yours. And I love that you can get into my head! You're right of course, the second hawk wouldn't be interesting to the story at large at all if it was just a girlfriend for Dermott. I've got another story (that will probably never be finished and therefor never be posted) where it turns out Maeve was Dermott's hawk-familiar. It came from me wondering where the rest if the matter goes after Dermott's been spelled. I mean, the weight difference between a young man and a hawk is significant and because we live in a more or less closed system (with the only addition being sunlight) matter cannot just go away, the system would self-correct in some way. So I figured if a human was turned into a hawk option A would be that the nearest hawk would be turned human or option B. the matter would convert to energy which would make the place where the spell was cast a place where strange and random magical things happen. (And then I theorized some more that those places would eventually connect, being drawn to each other and those are what we now call ley-lines) or option C. The caster balances the spell: finds a way to tie off/store/use the energy freed up by the excess matter. Heh, now you now why I love Firouz so much writing for him lets me bring out my inner geek ;D |
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Post by Eric/Deamus on Feb 3, 2013 15:31:46 GMT -5
WOOWWWW  now that was really good scientific thinking, and now -yeah- i can see you share my love to Firouz ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D i've studied to be scientist myself so that is exactly what i love,,,, returning everything going on back to a theory and scientific conclusion, well not every time it'll be scientific theory but how we think about that'd be scientific way ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D heheeeeeeeeeeee,, back to your theories, i prefer option B, the A,,, while C .... i see it's possible great thoughts here MJ, and keep hope, you may complete it one day,why not ? my idea ...... it's simpler and not focusing on the surrounding nature and natural balance,,, it's simpler than this, but ifi said about it it won't be any surprise for you, would it,,, ;D ;D ;D but definitely only Maeve is hawk, may be not full-transformation -still not sure- but for now i have the reason and the way she is being that,,, still no clue about they'll get her back and the adventure itself,,, some shadows but not real ideas still,,, hope i can write it one day and surprise you ;D ;D one final point,,,,,,,,, a hawk girlfriend for Dermot never cross my mind and i still find it weird and unrealistic for he is in the core human and will never think that way, except of course if she is cursed lady like him,,,,,,,, may be |
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Post by MJ on Mar 1, 2013 16:24:23 GMT -5
Here's a little one, too small to bother FF.N with.
The water and the dance
Sailing away from the horrors of the hell-house Sinbad found himself the bow of his Nomad, just staring out over the water.
Once upon a time, when he’d just been a boy the seas had taken his beloved parents and he’d hated the waters for it. They’d taken Lea and all he wanted was to get back at them. So when Doubar had taken him to sea, had taught him to sail, he’d decided he would conquer the water, he would master the seven seas, make them bow to his will.
His worst fear had been to drown; to be taken into those terrible, cold depths and just disappear, gasping for air.
What he hadn’t bargained for was the love he would grow to feel for the very waters he sought to conquer. He heeded her when the sea tried to tell him something, spotted her little tells, noticed all her quirks until he knew what she was going to do before it even happened. She wasn’t trying to drown him at all, they were in a dance, she and him, a dance no one else could see.
And then she took Maeve from him. It stung him in the secret places of his heart. He had trusted and she’d betrayed him. So he’d sought to punish her, to become a crueller master than he’d ever been before. But the water didn’t care and that tore at him.
Like a beacon there’d been red hair, streaming behind as the girl ran.
He’d followed her into hell.
And the seas finally took pity on him. They formed a creature out of their own existence and sent it to soothe his aching heart. She’d saved him from the clutches of the devil himself.
The water had restored him and he was thankful. No longer did he seek to conquer, just to dance with her once more. The water buoyed him up much higher when he sailed with love in his heart.
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Post by Doubar on Mar 1, 2013 19:35:28 GMT -5
Awww, gosh, I LOVE this!!! It's so very beautiful, MJ!!!! It's great how you deal with his 'feelings' towards the sea - how he first almost hated it (btw.: what a lovely move to personalize it!) and then, much to his surprise, found he could even love it. And then it betrays him and he wants revenge of some sort. And how that changes once more when Mala saves him. Indeed, to him she would not be what we see in her, instead she would be the sea to him. A good spirit, and I love so much the image you drew - of him dancing with the seas. Really. It's a brilliant little piece imo and though it's short indeed I wouldn't know why it should not go to ff.net. Important things can be said with few words only, and word count does not judge on a lovely read. Ah, but I start babbling.... It's pretty late already and I really should hit the hay. But when I saw this and read it I just had to let you know right away what I think. I will read the tag tomorrow, alright? (Btw.: Wheeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!! ;D ;D ;D ) |
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Post by MJ on Mar 2, 2013 12:29:35 GMT -5
This came from me looking at the final ep and noticing how much lighter Sinbad seemed at the end. I, as a fangirl, always attributed his darkness in S2 to Maeve's loss, and its compounding on earlier losses, ripping open old wounds. But maybe it wasn't about Maeve at all, or at least it wasn't about him missing her... Maybe it was about the choices he'd made in his life that led him there, choices he had never really regretted before. So much of his life was spent afraid- of drowing, of committing his love to another fragile life, of losing- but he was just beginning to trust that it would be alright. And then the unthinkable happened and rather than face it he jumped into the storm.
Because let's face it, a captain abandoning his ship in the middle of a storm is an awful thing to do. Suddenly there's no one bellowing orders to the crew, so they don't know what to do to keep the ship afloat. It might seem heroic to jump after a potential drowning victim, but he endangered the lives of everyone else on the ship by doing it. And considering he's supposed to be master of the seven seas, he would KNOW that. Still, his first instinct is to jump after Maeve and after his peace of mind.
And Mala was a sea-creature right? Or did I imagine that? I figured her to be a Nyad of some kind.
Anyway, it was a lot of thoughts like this (and many many more, but that would mean writing a disseration on the possibilities of the innermost workings of Sinbad's psyche and who has the time for that?) that worked itself out in those few lines.
Glad you like it Doubs!
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Indeed it seems reasonable. Either they all go insane over each other or they bond, the latter being even easier here since they got a common enemy. 
Aye, the young usually are the ones who are restless and I can well imagine that at some point even patient and calm Serendib would grow tired of Rumina's and Maeve's endless bickerings. x)
now that was really good scientific thinking, and now -yeah- i can see you share my love to Firouz ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D i've studied to be scientist myself so that is exactly what i love,,,, returning everything going on back to a theory and scientific conclusion, well not every time it'll be scientific theory but how we think about that'd be scientific way ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D heheeeeeeeeeeee,,