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Post by Doubar on Nov 25, 2010 14:58:21 GMT -5
Whow! That was awesome!!!  I love this chapter!!! Read and left a review! ;D Really great! And all that in 12 hrs. You really rock! ;D |
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Post by Kriss on Nov 25, 2010 15:01:03 GMT -5
Really great! And all that in 12 hrs. You really rock! ;D She is simply great, isn't she?  *hugs Sam just because, and Beth, too not to make her feel alone* ;D |
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Post by Doubar on Nov 25, 2010 15:07:29 GMT -5
Awwwwww...  *hugs Sam and Kriss* ;D ;D And of course she is. ;D ;D |
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Post by Rongar on Nov 25, 2010 16:28:01 GMT -5
*is happy*
(((HUGS TO BOTH)))
Thank you!
*Am off to read the review!*
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Post by Rongar on Nov 25, 2010 16:38:13 GMT -5
Doubar wrote Thank you very much! It's a continuing theme in the story! Exactly and Rumina has stirred up Maeve's anger and all the while Sinbad's healing from his wounds... Or course! He wouldn't be our favorite devil to hate if he wasn't! Don't you love the little twist he did to capture Turok?! LOL That one was a spur of the moment thought that I put in at the last second! Aye, it was supposed to show, actual proof, that what Doubar told him was true. I liked it too! It has a certain amount of promise and sorrow in it for so few words... Thank you! I had hoped it would be well received! I was a bit antsy at the lenght, but I didn't want to split it into four smaller chapters! Well, that and I was on a roll! I didn't want to stop! LOL You know I'll try my best! |
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Post by Doubar on Nov 25, 2010 18:45:16 GMT -5
You're welcome. It's nothing but the truth after all.  So I noticed. And I totally like it. Yes, that was really interesting to see. Poor Sinbad... he'll have to face a totally enraged and disappointed Maeve it seems. Indeed. ;D It's what we love him for. ;D Haha, and so the twist came to your mind in like the last second? Awesome. ;D And it did. Just like this, yes. No, it has just the right length this way. And the cliff hanger is just right, too. Would have been odd in fact, had you split it at another point. Heh, and yay for you being on a roll then. ;D I know. And you're doing brilliant with it! |
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Post by Rongar on Nov 25, 2010 19:34:11 GMT -5
Doubar wrote Yep! And therein lies their tests! Sinbad has to absolve himself one more time and Maeve has to find it in herself to understand and forgive him! LOL Yea, the twists was a last minute 'ah ha!'. I hadn't originally planned for it at all. But I thought, hey Caipra can misunderstand sometimes, even with her wisdom, and Scratch IS a devil so...why not? |
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Post by Doubar on Nov 26, 2010 4:40:34 GMT -5
Yep! And therein lies their tests! Sinbad has to absolve himself one more time and Maeve has to find it in herself to understand and forgive him! LOL Fabulous idea! THat's gonna be hard for the two, really! Yep, there was good reason for it. And once more yay for spontaneous ideas. ;D [/quote] |
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Post by Firouz on Nov 26, 2010 11:19:18 GMT -5
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Post by Firouz on Mar 24, 2011 17:49:05 GMT -5
It's been a LONG time in comming, but here's a tiny teaser of Chapter 12 part 2 of The Return of Maeve....
....let me know what you think of it.
The Return of Maeve 12
Absolution and Understanding
Part 2
Maeve felt her heart jolt at the sound of his voice.
It sent tendrils of love so passionate and fiery deep within her heart and soul; it also caused terrible tremors to erupt all along her body as she struggled to contain the rage she felt towards him and the horrifying memories she could not stop.
She wanted to hold him; she wanted to fry him.
She wanted to kiss him and never let go; she wanted to see him burn in hell and then drowned in acid.
She was so full of conflicting emotions she barely heard deep within her mind, Don’t let the rage consume you daughter, listen to the words of your family…listen to your true hearts desires….
“Lies, all he speaks of are lies…just remember all those kisses…’ whispered a loud voice full of evil and spite.
As she raised her head, she felt more tears well up in her burgundy tinted eyes. He was so handsome; dressed in clothes she had seen hundreds of time before. There he was and yet she couldn’t bring herself to go to him. She couldn’t bare to have him touch her like they had once embraced just a year ago.
He looked nothing like the Sinbad of the past year. In fact, he looked a hundred times better now than he had in the past year.
She bit her lip as her rage grew and her powers leaped inside her to do her bidding.
“Sinbad…….” She growled angrily as her voice trembled in suppressed wrath.
Her eyes began to flash a terrifying golden hue, her hands began to claw, and tiny sprouts of lighting bolts began to grow like tiny flowers on her finger tips.
Deep within the chambers where she had been flung into against her will, Rumina sat down as gracefully as a cat and grinned smugly as Maeve’s magic began to arch off her body and inch ever closer to Sinbad.
With every memory that flowed like an endless river inside her head, the daughter of Turok ensured her victory, once and for all, against the peasant witch and Sinbad.
“Soon, I’ll have my revenge dearest….”she whispered in an almost mocking, loving, tone as she gently lapped her finger tips through the water that showed Sinbad’s shocked and scared face in their depths.
Sinbad couldn’t believe his eyes.
There she was.
To him, she had never looked as beautiful as she did just then. Her heart was shining magnificently through her eyes and her voice sent waves of warmth through his body.
As he took a step closer, the ground beneath his feet crumbled like parchment under on of Firouz’s exploding bombs.
“What…?” he muttered to himself as he immediately stopped and raised his head and asked hesitantly, “Maeve…what’s going on?”
Maeve snorted and yelled snarkly as she crossed her arms, “As if you don’t know!”
Sinbad’s eyebrows rose in confusion, for he had never seen her this angry at anyone, least of all him, and asked again, “Maeve, I wouldn’t be asking if I did know, what’s happening? Are you all right?”
She gave a cry less laugh that sounded hollow in both their ears as she said, “You are the one who did this to me, Sinbad, with every kiss and tease, and look you tore my heart and soul apart…welcome to my personal hell.”
Sinbad’s tentative steps were frozen by her pungent and bitter words. His heart seized up in his chest and his lungs refused to work as he stumbled to a stop.
He gasped and grasped his heart in pain as the agony he had pushed deep within him rose to the surface and seized control of him in ways he had feared since the beginning.
From the corner of his eyes, he could see his predators, turned prey, once again change their fortune and claw at him as his darkness swelled in glorified victory.
He collapsed to his knees and stared up at her with unseeing eyes as he too began to see all those he had kissed.
DimDim, from his own cage, which wasn’t a cage so much as a very large space that hovered parallel to the world the other’s inhabited and let him watch but not interact with his family, could only watch with heart breaking sorrow as the two he saw as a son and a daughter met each other again in over a year. He knew this would be hard on them both, for not only were both terribly stubborn, both had pains of the heart that would not let them forgive so easily….
DimDim whispered into his seeing pool, “To young to experience so much pain, to old to receive such atonement…listen to your hearts, listen to your loves, listen to your souls and most importantly, listen to each other….”
Sinbad, as Gianna, Empress Hitria, Dara, and Bryn flashed through his mind. He remembered each kiss as they expressed something different that was so basically human about them all.
Gianna’s was of a hidden strength that he knew she would need as the Guardian of the Book of Before.
Empress Hitria’s showed just how rotten, spoilt, and commanding she really was; he didn’t enjoy it much at all. She had taken his power of choice and he had rebelled mightily against that even if it wasn’t readily shown.
Dara’s had held a thankfulness and a hint of sadness in it, for she had been in the process of mourning the loss of her friend, the prince.
Bryn’s well, it held passion, but it lacked the personal experiences of her life. Not that she was a bad kisser, no, but it did lack a certain accent that one can only gain through life experiences…like a person’s attitude, a person’s walk, a person’s mindset, and a person’s vocal accent.
Then the tears began to fall as Shirez found her way into his memory like a snake slithering its way into a bed. He remembered that night with such clarity that he blinked at it in confusion.
Never had he remembered anything with such clarity before!
It caused him to marvel at the vivid colors and the stark differences of her skin to the dark colors of his bed sheets.
His brows furrowed.
Something wasn’t right.
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Post by Kriss on Mar 25, 2011 6:01:56 GMT -5
Honey, I will take a look this weekend if I find some time  Promise |
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Post by Firouz on Mar 25, 2011 16:55:29 GMT -5
Whenever you can, it's a teaser after all.
I've edited what I have since I posted this one and added more too.
So, when you get the time, let me know what you think of it.
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Post by Kriss on Mar 26, 2011 8:07:34 GMT -5
*read* Me likes a lot You missed a few chicks ;D Like Taryn and Denna(who should be specified, she seemed to be someone much closer to our dear captain than all the others random chicks ) ;D Just my opinion, of course. Besides, I love it, really Especialy Maeve's part Her mixed feelings, an internal drama. It's very deep to read |
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Post by Firouz on Mar 26, 2011 11:39:05 GMT -5
Oh, yea, I had forgotten about them...what episodes were they in? What order did they come in? While its not very important, I could help me in describing what Sinbad sees in this chapter. Or could you tell me what they did??? I'll add them in.
Please....(puppy eyes)
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Post by Kriss on Mar 26, 2011 12:37:55 GMT -5
@firouz I will send you a pm |
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