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Post by Firouz on Jul 8, 2010 11:51:22 GMT -5
Thank You!
I'm glad you like it!!
I read your review and I'm glad you liked all the little twists I put in! ;D
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Post by Doubar on Jul 9, 2010 11:21:58 GMT -5
Well, it's hard to not like them. ;D
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Post by Firouz on Jul 9, 2010 11:29:00 GMT -5
That's good because I have a hard time trying to think them up and keep those twists in-character for my story.  |
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Post by Doubar on Jul 9, 2010 12:12:04 GMT -5
Well, you're definitely doing a great job there, honey, because so far they all are totally in-character! |
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Post by Firouz on Jul 9, 2010 18:52:30 GMT -5
;D
Thank you!
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Post by Firouz on Sept 14, 2010 18:52:16 GMT -5
I guess I wasn't thinking when I wrote and posted chapter 9. For there was a portion of it that I typed completely wrong! I just went back, to reread what I have written so I could continue with the next chapter (hopefully) soon. I couldn't believe that I wrote it wrong! It wasn't a terrible mistake, but it has a small significance to the rest of the story-later on. I went back and fixed it though. You can go back and read it or not...like I said it wasn't a big mistake (chapter-wise) but plot-wise it will be later on. The change was like four words so at the end with Turok so... (Shrugs) I can't believe I did that and didn't catch it when I editted it before!   |
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Post by Firouz on Sept 14, 2010 19:21:25 GMT -5
Hey all! I have an idea about what Dermott's test shall be, but I'm having a bit of a problem in the details... I want Dermott's test to be on his resolve in taking the blow/spell for Maeve years ago, you see, but there a small portion of him (the selfish part in us all) that blames Maeve for him being trapped as a hawk. Now, I just need a situation in which this aspect of him shall escape him and confront him. How can I have this tested (and yes the chamber WILL bring that part of him out). What I want is a situation...like should he relive that time through the spell, should it be a realistic dream/nightmare, should it be Rumina rumaging in his thoughts and taunting him? Any ideas would help. Any ideas? I'm stuck I'm afraid. I know where I want it to go, but like I said, these details are killing me here.....  |
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Post by Maeve on Sept 14, 2010 19:35:50 GMT -5
I like the idea of Rumina somehow taunting him...Say, she can take him back to the day when he was cursed and they relive it as witnesses, with her all the while viscously trying to turn him against his sister to make him realize that she's the one to blame in this and not her. She can try to stir up the anger in him concerning Maeve's behaviour when she stubbornly stood up to Rumina to defy her. If it hadn't been for her spitfire attitude he wouldn't be like this and ya-di-ya-da...You know, Rumina whispering things to him to torment him and confuse him... Hope that helps...   |
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Post by Firouz on Sept 14, 2010 19:55:50 GMT -5
I was thinking something similar... Its just that it'll be hard for me since I'm not a taunting kind of person. It'll be a challenge to write Rumina's vindictiveness in it's full potential since she's still smarting over how Turok and Scratch have treated her and now she has a wonderful target for her evilness..... If anyone else has an idea, or an idea to help support this one from Maeve and me, I'd really appreciate it! ((Thinks to herself....details...details...details.... ))
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Post by Mala on Sept 15, 2010 5:30:47 GMT -5
Well, at the moment I'm rather blank when it comes to details but want to voice out nevertheless that I totally like the idea with Rumina dragging Dermott back to that moment, watching it with him and whispering words to him trying to turn him against his sister. But well, things could work like this for example: Dermott enters the realm but - and if I remember right Rumina was about to interfer anyway, right? - this time Rumi is here to make things worse (maybe Caipra could notice it, too, but isn't able to interfere) so when Dermott arrives there, she's there as well to temper with his test. I would envision Dermott to be there in his human shape - which would be a rather interesting aspect me thinks and could make him wonder for some time. Then somehow (that's up to you - he could hear voices or anything) the scenery comes back to him (could be like a mist that's clearing up or anything) and finally he recongizes she's back in his childhood/teen days and moreover it's the day when he got cursed. That's when Rumina could show up, too, and at first Dermott would argue with her, attack her even maybe, but she would ward that off easily and talk to him instead. At first she might just be trying her luck with talking him into thinking it's his sister's fault but when she sees the tiny selfish part in his eyes light up [most likely while he has to watch how Maeve stood up against Rumina], she knows she can push this button further. That's what I would envision right now. It might not be what you got in mind and it might be I didn't explain it well so do not hesitate to ask if you don't understand something I wrote.  |
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Post by Rongar on Sept 15, 2010 16:35:19 GMT -5
Yes, that's right. Rumi is about to enter the tests. That's an idea! Like I said, I'm having some problems with the details! And having Caipra sense Rumi's entrance would definately burden her more than ever! Yea, I know what I want with this. You got this on spot on! Possibly one of those would be the trigger.... **Thinks to self...animals, animals, animals...which ones to use to attack Rumi with?** I had this in mind too! I guess I'll just let the scene happen with what I have! LOL After all, I haven't failed yet by doing this, have I? Hopefully, the chapter will be up within a week or two.... Thanks! *************** Oh, and if anyone else has any ideas or supporting ideas, don't be afraid to tell me! I might use them! ;D |
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Post by Mala on Sept 16, 2010 4:24:54 GMT -5
That's an idea! Like I said, I'm having some problems with the details! And having Caipra sense Rumi's entrance would definately burden her more than ever! Oh, definitely. It would add to what you already described: that she knows things but cannot prevent them from happening. And indeed this would be like the heaviest burden to her - to know that Rumina is interfering, yet she (Caipra) cannot do the same. Cool.  Yeah. Or it could be like he's standing in the mists (or in a forest or anywhere) and hears muffled voices or sounds. He follows them and the closer he gets to them, the more familiar they are until finally he reaches the scene. *clicks tongue* Call for Goz! He's got some friends who'd love to say hello to Rumi-kins. ;P Yup, just let it flow. It worked brilliantly with the other chapters and am sure that the new one will be awesome as well! You're very welcome. |
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Post by Firouz on Sept 16, 2010 18:23:17 GMT -5
LOL!! Somehow, I don't think Goz will be showing up, but I might be able to use the idea of men/animals! ;D
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Post by Firouz on Sept 17, 2010 22:57:11 GMT -5
Well, Dermott's chapter is up! Let me know what you think of it! I think it's the longest chapter to date! And it only took me, roughly, 8 hours to dream and type up! ;D **Wipes perspiration from temple** www.fanfiction.net/s/5358561/11/The_Return_of_Maeve |
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Post by Mala on Sept 18, 2010 11:12:02 GMT -5
Whoa, so soon?  I will read as soon as possible. |
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I will read as soon as possible.