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Post by Firouz on May 1, 2010 16:25:31 GMT -5
I'm glad you liked it Kriss!
But, what part did you like overall?
I'm curious since our Bryn's are opposites in our fics.
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Post by 19101989 on May 1, 2010 16:31:20 GMT -5
@firouze: Fanfiction.net is that horrible?  why all these sites like facebook, YT, and FF.net are always suck but It's okay i could read them nonetheless.  and Nha, I think that your writing style which is like a quick shots succeed in describing her feelings just brilliant. It's like a quick rhythm which matches the heartbeats. making it quick when it's suspenseful moments and making it slow when It's emotional or thoughtful ones. very well done. |
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Post by Firouz on May 1, 2010 16:33:26 GMT -5
**Beams happily**
**Very proud of myself**
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 5:21:25 GMT -5
What? Bryn's part is up? *gets all giddy* Aw My Dawd, I gotta read it right away.  *hurries to get to fanfic.net  * Oh, by the way, Firouz: I encountered the same with the stars.  It just won't work. Only thing you can try is insert a line to seperate the parts. |
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 5:42:57 GMT -5
*is back from reading, gasps* OMG, Firouz! That was AWESOME! Totally brilliant! I of course left my comment. And about the lines ... hum, well, yeah, in deed - this one part was a bit tricky (where suddenly Turok comes into play). Dunno, maybe a line to seperate the parts would be a good idea there. But asides that one it was just amazing! Congrats on such a brilliant work, honey. |
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Post by Kriss on May 2, 2010 8:14:19 GMT -5
@firouz You're welcome. Yes, our Bryn's are opposites in our fics but really like your idea. Love how you describe her feelings. My version looks differnet: 1# I'm rather lame writer and my "arts" is not so bitter. 2# I'm faithful the idea, my feeling for Bryn are completly different. 3# Our plotlines are differnet and we need for them different version. |
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Post by 19101989 on May 2, 2010 8:27:22 GMT -5
1# I'm rather lame writer and my "arts" is not so bitter. might i ask why you think you're a lame writer and a lame fanarts maker? what makes you think so? |
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Post by Kriss on May 2, 2010 8:31:06 GMT -5
might i ask why you think you're a lame writer and a lame fanarts maker? what makes you think so? I didn't say I'm lame fanarts maker. Here "arts" mean stories. |
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 10:55:14 GMT -5
*nudges Kriss* But you aren't a lame writer, honey. You got your own style - that's all. Your story is really nice, too, so be a little more confident, okay?   |
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Post by Kriss on May 2, 2010 11:01:09 GMT -5
*nudges Kriss* But you aren't a lame writer, honey. You got your own style - that's all. Your story is really nice, too, so be a little more confident, okay? Thank you *hugs* But the author can't be too confident not to got the kick of criticism. |
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 11:05:03 GMT -5
*hugs back* Always. Okay, I grant you this one. Being full of oneself doesn't help either, but believe me dear, you can be a little more self-confident. *nudges Kriss again, smiles* |
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Post by Kriss on May 2, 2010 11:08:21 GMT -5
Okay, I grant you this one. Being full of oneself doesn't help either, but believe me dear, you can be a little more self-confident. *nudges Kriss again, smiles* Okay, okay... |
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 11:14:23 GMT -5
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Post by Firouz on May 2, 2010 11:49:48 GMT -5
(((HUGS Kriss))) Agreed with Doubar! You are a GREAT writer! *************************** Thanks Doubar! I'm glad you like my story chapter of Bryn too! I can't wait to read the review! |
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Post by Doubar on May 2, 2010 12:30:22 GMT -5
@firouz: My review should already be there since I posted it right after reading. |
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why all these sites like facebook, YT, and FF.net are always suck 
*hurries to get to fanfic.net 
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It just won't work. 
