The final war

[manche]

There is the beginning of my story:

This story takes place almost one year after the events from the episode Sacrifice. I am planning a bit longer story, it takes some time until the finishing of my story.

It was the next nice day. Maeve expected the next training with her master. It passed almost one year from the moment when her master saved her before the death. She has learned a lot of new things in her magic during this year. Dim Dym still repeated her that the dark forces become stronger every day and it is necessary to be ready for the dangerous future. He repeated her that their rescue is only the matter of time. “Our rescue is only easier part of our task, Maeve. After that, we will be fighting in the final war between good and evil. The destiny of the world depends on it. The victory of evil would mean the end of the old world. We must be prepared.”

Dim Dym’s concerns were not gratuitous. He has watched the events in the world via his seeing pool. Turock returned from the death and he and Rumina cooperated with Scratch, the most powerful demon in the west. Their armies have started to attack a lot of islands and countries all around the world. They have left the devastating traces everywhere. Their losses were insignificant. People were frightened and some islands gave up. Two biggest kingdoms, Basra and Bagdad, teamed up and tried to gather as many fighters as it was possible against this evil. This situation was hard especially for the young king of Bagdad Casib. He was the king less than a year and he did not have not much combat experience. His old dad was still alive, but he was seriously ill and he was not able to help him. Casib got some advice by older and experienced Omar, but his losses in the fights were quite big. Omar could not help him so much; he had a lot of work with protection of his own kingdom. Turock recognized that Casib is weaker and the attacks on his kingdom started to be more frequent. His army was not able to defeat the armies of enemies alone. Omar could not send him many people to help, one of his biggest colonies was under the permanent attack for a few weeks and he was able to maintain this colony only with the greatest effort. Its loss could weak his kingdom very much. Casib decided to ask Sinbad and his crew for the help.

Maeve was waiting for Dim Dym, but he did not come yet. She knew what he does. He probably watched something in his pool. She has watched it occasionally with him. They have watched the moments from the fights, despair and hopelessness of the people who dared to defy evil, some people were captured and were killed very cruel and painful way, some of them were forced to join the dark side. They have also watched the life of the Sinbad’s crew. Dim Dym sent them a new witch Bryn, he knew that she has an important role in the final battle. She has learned magic during whole year and her ability of usage her magic has improved very much. She has visited his wife Caipra in Basra and Caipra tried to help her. Bryn got a few magic books by her and she got some tracks which will help the whole crew find him and Maeve. Bryn realized the importance of her task and she did the best, the rest of the crew tried to help her. But there were next important events, which could not be ignored. The crew helped to prevent a few islands before attacks, but it was clear, that they need more power. The results of the battles were not good, some islands were destroyed and the surviving inhabitants were forced to run. Firouz was injured during the last battle, when he tried to save a few inhabitants and the explosion of his sticks hit him a little. His right leg was seriously injured and although he used his best medicine and Bryn tried her best magic, it looked that he will have troubles with walking for the rest of his life. This accident only confirmed that the crew needs more power. Bryn found the mention about the island, where is hidden the most powerful force of good, but there was not any mention about the location of this island. Caipra did not also know the location of this island. She only remembered that Dim Dym talked about the similar place. “He knows his location. We have the next reason for finding him.” said Sinbad.

Maeve was still waiting when Dim Dym appeared. But his intention at this moment was not the next training. “You have to go with me.” said. They went to his house, where was his seeing pool. “Our rescue will be there in one week. Bryn does not know it in this moment, but she will find the last track very soon. It is the right time. The evil is too strong. We have only one chance. You look at the situation.”

Maeve reluctantly went to the seeing pool. She did not like these moments. She recalled her past every day and she was very sad. She wished to be back with her best friends and she wanted to have the opportunity to fight with Rumina. She missed the whole crew. She missed Doubar and his eternal optimism, Firouz’s scientific monologues, Rongar’s silence support, her own brother, she was curious of Bryn, she heard a lot of things about her by Dim Dym. And she missed Sinbad, the most of them.

[Doubar]

Oooh, I really like this start! It sounds intriguing and I appreciate how you take up on the events of "Vengeance of Rumina", and how you keep Bryn having an important role in all of this.

I can easily imagine this is going to be a huge project, but therefore it will also be fascinating. Can't wait to know what this powerful force of good would be and what role Bryn will in fact have in it all. It's so rare to have male authors write for the show - it's so awesome that you do!

Hope to read more soon.

[manche]

Thank you Doubar. I have the basic structure of the whole story and I must extend this basic structure . I have a lot of work in the present time and this is the good thing for relaxation after the whole day of learning. It takes some time, but I will be trying. I write stories sometimes and I like this Tv series very much.

[Eric/Deamus]

Well, that's interesting beginning,, it left me waiting for the following..
but i was sad about Firouz permanent injury!! can't imagine him like that,, however it sounds realistic and that's actually what i prefer about stories.
Nice work

only one thing i noticed -but not a big deal, and doesn't affect your story anyway,, but i thought i can mention it just for your own knowledge in general - that both Basra & Baghdad aren't kingdom but cities,,, Baghdad is the capital and leader where the Caliph rule all the other parts of the kingdom including Basra which left Omar as Imir or prince and by this it shouldn't mean that he is related to the royal family in Baghdad, but has his own however he still rule under the name of the Caliph of Baghdad (Casib 's father), which make Casib not also a king but Caliph!

however the war and misunderstanding between both cities that was mentioned in the show only mean that Omar wanted to rule by his own name only and don't belong to the Caliph of Baghdad and such things, which happened frequently in the old times, as it only occurred when the Caliph is a weak one, or that the Caliph changed the Imir authorities like deceasing it or taking some lands from his authority and of course the Imir refused,
hopefully things rested in peace between both of them thanks to Sinbad efforts in the show,,
so it's very normal as shows your story that Casib asked for help from Omar,,,
by this, as Baghdad remains the capital, the other cities (even the strongest one) and/or a collection of cities will be considered as Emirates or Principalities .... and the ruler will be Imir or Prince,,

but as i said,,, this is a story, so you don't have to take it serious,,, i just like to tell you for general knowledge

[manche]

I have not decided yet how much serious Firouz's injury will be, he may hobble a little or he may be a little slower or it can be more serious, but the role of his character wil not be less important in the story, this I can promise...
Thanks for your insights, I have learned something new...

[Eric/Deamus]

Oh, i hope it won't be serious injury for him -can't help but love our dear scientist ;D - but i'm very glad he'd get important role in your adventure can't wait for more

May 8, 2013 13:53:43 GMT -5 manche said:

Thanks for our insights, I has learned something new...

the pleasure is all mine i'm happy i could be a little helpful

[manche]

I did the next piece of my story:

At the same moment, the crew was approaching Baghdad. The message, which they had got by Casib was very urgent. The defense of Bagdad was weaker every day. Rongar was on duty at the tiller. Firouz was on the board, he was sitting on a crate next to Bryn, who was trying to decipher the last track of the book. He did not want to spend the whole day lying in his cabin, although he knew that absolute serenity would be beneficial to his leg more. He had pain in his leg during longer walking, but he hoped that his injury becomes better over time. He was trying to create new inventions, he was preparing new plans for them and he was the member of the crew, who helped Bryn most with finding the tracks in the book. He was talking about it with her in this moment. “You are very close to the solution Bryn. The last thing which we must find is how we will get into the another realm.“ Bryn was thinking about it constantly. “It is important to repeat all facts, which we have. So, this island is in another realm. This realm was created many years ago by the evil sorcerer Thillo and it was the place for the imprisonment of his enemies. Solitude should be their bane, no possibility of escape. Many sorcerers found the records about this prison and they also use it. The good magicians were able to find this island a few years ago, but only two of them have returned back. We know the place, where is the gate for entering into this realm. But this island is not visible in our realm. There exists an incantation, which we have to use after getting into this location. It is there, in this book, but I do not see it.” she said a little desperately. “Bryn, you will find it. You were able to find the location and you said that it was the worst part. Your cognitive abilities are fascinating.” tried Firouz to encourage her. She smiled at him a little. “Thank you, Firouz.” They looked toward the prow, where Sinbad was standing. “He is rather reticent the last few weeks, is not he?” noted Bryn. “A lot of bad things happened in the last few months. I do not feel also very well when I think about it. Do you remember the last island? It was Mylagia. We had a few friends there. Almost whole population of the island was killed by black magic. And it was only one of a thousand destroyed islands.” Bryn was silent and she looked into the book again.

Sinbad was standing by the prow and he was watching the horizon in front of him. He looked very thoughtfully. All members of the crew have noticed that his mood is bad for the last few weeks. They talked about it among themselves and Doubar was chosen for the serious talk with Sinbad. He was walking towards him, he stopped next to him and he was also watching the horizon. “Sinbad,” he started, “all of us have fear of you. You eat little, you are able spent almost whole night on the board without sleeping and you talk very occasionally.” Sinbad was silent for a moment. It looked that he did not say anything. Suddenly he said: “It is almost one year, Doubar. We experienced better times, my brother. But everything started to turn for the worse a year ago. The return of Turock and the loss of Maeve very early after that were only the beginning. The whole world is in the war, some of our friends are dead and we have no weapon for defeat of Rumina and others." "But the island, which is mentioned...” said Doubar, but Sinbad talked again. “I hope that we will find Dym Dim and Maeve and with their help we will find this powerful magic. I do not give up anything, Doubar. But I have fear sometimes that the world will be irreparably damaged after the defeat of evil.” He smiled at his brother. “I did not want to attach next worries any of you. When will we arrive to Bagdad?” “I guess, that we do not need more than one day.” said the first mate. “The Captain!” shouted the crewman Barada from the patrol. He was using the Firouz’s magnoscope. “I am seeing the island. It is around two miles away. Something is burning on the island. It is the sign again. The sign of Scratch!” “My better mood lasted for about one minute.” said Sinbad ironically. “I am seeing one lifeboat, the captain.” continued Barada. “We have to help the survivors.” decided Sinbad. Rongar started to adjust the ship's course towards the shipwrecked according the Barada’s instructions.

[Doubar]

Aw, no, Mylagia... that rings a bell. Which island was this, Manche? It's so sad to read about the destruction and how evil seems to be close to winning the war. But at the same time it's so nice to see the crew still work together as one: that Bryn is doing her best to help, that Firouz is encouraging her even though he's always been rather doubtful about magic, that Doubar is there for Sinbad and... well, it's just nice to see that some things never change.
And so the island was actually made by black magic? Interesting. I wonder what that's all about and whether the white magicians who went there but never came back actually still live there or what else happened to them.

Thanx for sharing your story as it progresses.

[manche]

Mylagia is the island from the episode The Monument.

[MJ]

Love the story, an epic end battle between good and evil always gets me.

Here's some well meant con-crit, as always: you can take it or leave it as this is your story and you can do with it what you want.

1. Block-text is not your friend. When copy/pasting from word into the message box here the enters fall away, so you have to put them in again. A story that's just a block of text is very hard to read.
2. This reads more like a story-outline than an actual story. General advice I can give you to fix that is: Show, don't tell. That basically means you describe what happened instead of just saying that it happened.

That's all, hope you continue soon!

[manche]

Thanks for your insights, I wanted to do a global introduction into the situation at first and I am going to decribe events directly, I think that I has started with it in the last post...

[manche]

I have got the idea for the new twist today, so I am curious of your reactions to it.

Nomad reached the lifeboat during the moment. There were six men in the boat; two of them were seriously injured. The crew recognized one of them, it was Belkor. They met him two years ago during the meeting with Vorgon. The crew helped the survivors get on the board and Firouz started to treat the wounded. It showed that Belkor is the leader of this boat and that he wants to return on the island. “We must return on the shore immediately. We are not the last lifeboat. Two next lifeboats were supposed to leave the island with us. There still exists a chance for Omar and the rest of the men.“ “What happened, Belkor? What are you doing here? Your island is located further to the north.” “It is a longer story. We are very close the shore. When we got new support, we should try the return.” Sinbad hesitated, but he heard a noise from the shore, it sounded as the calling about help. He ordered to prepare one boat. He boarded the boat with Belkor, Bryn, Rongar, two crewmen Barada and Evan and with two of the Belkor’s men. Doubar got the order by Sinbad to stay on the board for the worst case. He did not want it, but the order was the order. The lifeboat arrived to the shore during a few minutes.

There were two boats and ten people a few feet away from them, who were fighting with skeletons and Scratch’s fire fighters. A few dead bodies were lying on the sand. The rest of the soldiers were trying to break through to one of the boats, but the preponderance was enormous. Most of the soldiers were injured, including Omar, but they did not want to give up. Sinbad and the others hurried to them. But there was not any chance for winning in the normal fight. The fire fighters were more dangerous, everyone who was hit with their fire swords, was burned to ash. One of the Omar’s soldiers, who was fighting next to Sinbad was hit and during few seconds was dead. “We need a good spell, Bryn.” exclaimed Sinbad. She tried to concentrate; Belkor and Sinbad moved closer to her they were prepared to protect her by their own bodies. Belkor was stabbed by one of the skeletons in his stomach. Bryn’s eyes flashed yellow and the big gust of wind suddenly started to move towards enemies. It was the big strength; the most of them were affected and they were unconscious. “It helps only for a few minutes.” said Bryn. “We must go. Everyone, who is not injure help the injured into the boat. We use one of these boats. Rongar, you and Barada take care of the second boat.” Rongar nodded and the both men started to push the second boat towards the sea.

Sinbad with Bryn helped injured Belkor, Evan helped Omar. But nobody knew that the skeletons and Scratch fire’s fighters were not only enemies on the island. In the bush, which was by the second boat, was the new ruler of this island. There was Rumina personally. She only wanted to see the final defeat of Omar and she was shocked by the twist in the situation. But she had the quick thinking and came up with the new game for her amusement. “The world is too small for us, Sinbad. You have crossed my path several times. But I have a punishment for you, something worse than death. You will die after losing of your miserable friends.” Rongar and Barada pushed the boat to the sea almost, and they wanted to load up the crew. Barada watched the lying fighters cautiously; some of them started to recover from unconsciousness. “It is time to go, Rongar.” he said. The Sinbad’s lifeboat was a nice piece away at the sea. And suddenly Rumina appeared behind the second boat and she shouted: “It is good to see you again, the Baldy. Say hello to the village goose and the senile old man from me.” Rongar reached for the knife quickly, Barada pulled his sword again, but it was too late. Rumina’s spell hit Rongar full force and Barada was also hit a little. “No!!!” shouted Sinbad and Bryn desperately, but Rongar and Barada disappeared. Rumina laughed out loudly and disappeared before their eyes. The warriors on the beach began to rise from the ground and there was not any chance for the return. Sinbad forgot to row and stared in the shock at the beach. The rest of the people on the beach ran the boat on the water and one of them began to paddle away in the last second.

Rongar was disoriented for a moment and then began to slowly rise from the ground. He was in the middle of an island; next to him was Barada, who had also begun to rise from the ground. He heard steps behind him and he turned towards an incoming with his sword. He stared very wonderingly. And Maeve told him: “Welcome to this island, Rongar. I wished to meet you again, but I hoped that we meet under better circumstances.” Rongar overcame his amazement and rushed to hug her.

[Doubar]

Ah, thanx for reminding me.

Whoa, and now Rongar's in the lost realm, too? Now that I call quite a twist indeed. But one I really like. And it's also interesting to see that Rumina can send poeple into that realm, too, and not only Admir. Kinda implies that she must also be able to release the victims... hum... interesting thought. ^^

Thanx for sharing!

[manche]

When I created the idea, that the island was used for imprisonment of the people who were enemies of evil sorcerers, i think that Rumina is more powerful than Admir (I am not sure if there was said more about his power) and i think that it is the worst punishment for the crew than killing him simply, the leaving of the island is possible, but it is dangerous also.

[Doubar]

Yeah, I think you got a point there. Rumina could well be more powerful than Admir. By the end of S1 she certainly was anyway. I think Admir/Iblis introduced himself as a lord of the dark djins so he must've been quite a mighty creature. I mean, after all he was able to imprison DimDim - one of the greatest white sorcerers the AoS world knows. >.>