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Post by Firouz on Sept 29, 2011 18:54:30 GMT -5
Maybe the pic is a bit washed out, but the fic totally makes up for it!
I still like the pic though...if one gets philosophical a bit, it could be a representation of their feelings at the beginning of the fic...so disconnected and bland...which is SO not Sinbad and Maeve true selves.
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Post by Doubar on Sept 30, 2011 11:56:40 GMT -5
Awww, thank you so much for r&r, Firouz!!!   Hah, and GREAT ideas on the pic. ;D The thought is not even bad, as I had a faint ountline for it in mind, and that one was indeed to cover the emotion which I also wanted to show in the fic. Only that after a certain point onwards I lost inspiration completely. xD Anyhow, once again thanx! |
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Post by banmaixanh on Sept 30, 2011 12:02:18 GMT -5
It's late now, I cannot tell you what I feel about your new fic, the only thing I can say that I love it. I will give you some description about my feeling tomorrow. |
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Post by Doubar on Sept 30, 2011 12:43:12 GMT -5
Awwww, thank you so much, Ban!!! I truly am happy to hear that you like it. And I'll look forward to tomorrow then! Sleep well then, dear!  |
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Post by Firouz on Sept 30, 2011 17:53:39 GMT -5
You're Welcome Doubar!
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Post by banmaixanh on Oct 1, 2011 4:18:33 GMT -5
 It's nothing much to say, but hard to find the right words. I just want to talk about my feeling. It's "feeling" so it's maybe different with what the others see or what you really want to talk. However, It's literature not math. Two people can't have the same result. What you wrote I can feel the loneliness and the pain of Maeve, when she came back to the place where she looked for, but it was not like what she remembered. The same place, the same people but everything was different. It was her familly but she was not sure if she still belong to that place. She was alone in the place she called home. It's so sad to her like that. The thing hurt the worst is the part you described the hope, the truth Maeve held on when she was trapped. And after that I saw the pain Maeve must stand when she saw the truth. The truth was total different with what she believed in. And this pain, it seemed like too much for Maeve. She had lost once and when she learned to trust someone again, she lost again. The part with Dermott, I like the way you made Maeve changed her mind. Hard and slow, with those pains she had stood before, it is not easy for her to trust totally in what her brother told her, but I can see the change in her through your word. And it's a good way to solve that kiss. I don't know how to solve it. It's really hard for Maeve to accept. The part I like the best is, you must know it, the sword. It surprised me as much as Maeve. And I wondered the same thing with Maeve when I saw Sinbad in her cabin. I could see how Sinbad and Maeve reacted right in front of my eyes. I could image the eyes Sinbad looked at Maeve when he gave her the sword and felt what he felt and too, felt what Maeve felt the same moment. And the ending of it, I saw the sun rising. It's wonderful, Doubar. Your story, it talked what I want to talk, it described all what I feel and solved the problem perfectly. In my stories, I chose that the kiss didn't happen because I don't know how to solve it to not hurt Maeve. Let she know about that kiss would hurt her like hell. I love her too much to let this happen and at least in my stories I didn't let this happen. And one more thing, Firouz cooked for Dermott??? Oh, my poor Dermott. ;D ;D ;D |
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Post by Doubar on Oct 1, 2011 10:42:49 GMT -5
@firouz: @ban: Ah, wow, thank you for this detailed review!!!! And don't you ever worry about the results of your thinking! You are indeed right. What we do is no maths and there can't be a wrong or right. And I appreciate a lot btw your talking about what emotions you had while reading. Plus, know that what you described, the impressions you had are EXACTLY what I wanted to express!!! "Coming home" was sort of the climax of my ponderings about the events in S2. You see, when I started writing fanfiction I was more or less neglecting them, and most of all the kiss between Bryn and Sinbad. But over the course of time, and especially ever since I focused more on Bryn as a character, I realized that I could and did not want to pretend it didn't happen anymore. So I started to work things through, and this story is somewhat the result of everything. And in this regard, yes, Maeve was meant to feel disconnected and disappointed at the beginning. I guess it's the hope of returning to the place she longed for but that somehow does not exist anymore. Nothing can stay the same, we all have to learn that through life. And the Nomad changed, only that these changes are just on the outside and this is what Maeve has to learn. In my own little universe Bryn after all is destined to find her own future with someone else *caugh, caugh*, and thus what Maeve thinks to be lost is not lost at all. But she needs Dermott to make her see. What her brother though can indeed not make undone is the fact that in some way Sinbad betrayed her. And I guess I am being an old softie when I defend him and state that he only chased after every girl he met, because he was hurt and lost himself. But, this is my own little almost-perfect world, and in that world Sinbad deep inside is still the good man he was, and in that world he can find the way back to being that one again. ;D And thank you btw for liking the part between Dermott and Maeve. It's the first time that I have actually given the birdie a voice in my stories, and I'm happy to hear that the result was okay. As for liking the sword-part best: Honey, be asured that you're not the only one there. It's my favo part, too, and the part I enjoyed the most to write. You must know, writing comes the easiest to me when I can see everything happen infront of my 'eyes'; and I did see them there, too. I saw her surprise, and his, and saw them talk to each other using more than just plain words. And I am SO glad that I was able to transport this - to bring it all across so that you as a reader may experience the same, and share the 'vision' I had. Once again, thank you a bunch for your review, Ban! I appreciate a lot you sharing your thoughts on this story; and I feel honoured that you took the time and read this little fic of mine. And as for this one: Aye, I, too, feel torn about this. The kiss is a big burden - for Maeve, and for the relationship between her and Sinbad. But luckily we, as the authors, are the kings of the little stories we create, and as such I decided for Maeve to have the strength to overcome this hurt. And to actually make her and Sinbad grow on what has happened. Loooooool!!!!! Yes, he did. ;D Thanx for taking notice of this little side-joke. I so LOVE how Firouz roasted that fish in S1 and the guys look rather disgusted. But I figured that for Dermott he would actually create something really tasty - and considering that usually the birdie prefers to eat raw meat that shouldn't be all to hard now should it? ;D P.S.: @firouz: Sowwie, sweetie!!! *hugs* You know we all love the inventor, don't you? P.P.S.: @ban: I really hope that some day you'll get those stories of yours translated! I'm sure I'm not the only one who'd love to read them! |
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Post by banmaixanh on Oct 1, 2011 13:17:23 GMT -5
you're welcome. About what happened in S2, you're right. I also can't pretend like that kiss did not happen when Bryn is also my main character. So at first I accepted that kiss, and I wanted to write something hurt, but when I started, I didn't know how to heal the wound in Maeve's heart. If she can't forgive him, one of them must die, it is the result of some idea run across my mind. But when write it down, I cannot write because it’s hurt too bad. However, I have a little idea when I told my friend all my think. she told me: - “Maeve wasn't anything of Sinbad when she left, right?”. I said: - “He loved her, and she loved him too. They all knew that." she said: - “Maeve wasn't anything of him, she couldn't say he betrayed her when he had never told her that he loved her. It would have been sweet if he had waited for her. However, when he had not, you also couldn't blame him. He had freedom to come to other women. The problem is that, when Maeve comes back, will he find out who is his real love?” I got angry with her: -“ you don't understand.” And calmly she told me : - “you want me tell you the way to solve the kiss. Didn't I already found it for you? Maeve comes back, and Sinbad must find out who is his true love. Maeve is maybe hurt when she know about the kiss, but she can forgive and accepts Sinbad's love if he still loves her because he has never betrayed her truth in him, before all this happened they had not been anything of each other." I thought about what she told me and found out it is the really excellent idea. Maeve could hurt but couldn't hate Sinbad. She must accept the truth that Sinbad had his own right to come to those women, and it would give her a chance to accept his love for her. She can only hate him if he betrays her when he is hers. Take this sigh of it, what happens with Bryn also like what happens with other women, it has no meaning. Maeve could a bit sad and hurt when she saw Bryn and Sinbad were so close, but after all his love is hers. My stories base on that idea. It can be sweet or hurt depend on the way I make Maeve faces with Sinbad with the love, which she thinks that she can’t send. It wouldn’t hurt her too bad like she lose all hope and truth in Sinbad, it too much for my poor Maeve. Her heart already hurt enough. And bout what you sad about my fics. Thank you, but I it must be long until then, I haven't finished Vietnamese version yet. Too much thing need to fix here. But I have something here. It is Maeve and it is just only summarisation. "I am walking in the rose garden, and you come as if you have never forgotten your promise. Look at deep into your eyes, I know, love still stays in your heart, beautiful as the stars. Your love is always there along with time. Call out your name, I feel the sun rising on my lips. The word you say, and the peace in your eyes, I know that day is not far. I close my eyes, and our lips meet. You don't care if I fell in love with someone in the past. I don't care if you closed with someone when I didn't stay beside you. It's all past. Right now, the only thing we know that is our love lies deep inside our heart, and we know we belong to each other. You come to me, give me your love. We would never leave each other again. And this night, under the beautiful moonlight, I understand that our love is not something too far."
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Post by Doubar on Oct 1, 2011 15:01:24 GMT -5
Awww, alright, I see. Yeah, that's definitely an idea as how to solve that problem. Because, in a way, yes, they were never commited to one another. It's a different way of thinking to say that none of this mattered because technically Maeve and Sinbad have never been a couple, thus there cannot be a true betrayal. And while it sure enough is a difficult thing to say when one wants to believe that what they had was special, it does well serve for what you described. And in some way it's even more realistic! Still, yes, Maeve will hurt but this version gives hope, too. For we all know who Sinbad will choose on, don't we? ;D And as for your story: aw, don't feel rushed. I know what it's like to work on a long story. x) But be asured that your summarisation sounds great!! What you wrote is so tender in a way, and somehow even melodic. Almost like a poem! I really hope that one day you'll get to finish and translate your story because it definitely sounds promising! |
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Post by Firouz on Oct 1, 2011 16:21:42 GMT -5
*crawls onto deck*
So tired...
...an hour of canoeing followed by 7 hours of wedding shopping with my friend...
*conks out on deck...ZZZ*
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Post by Doubar on Oct 1, 2011 16:29:23 GMT -5
*gets blanket and puts it around sleeping Firouz* Oh dear, that does indeed sound straining!! Do have a rest then, my friend. You honestly deserve it after such a day!!!
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Post by banmaixanh on Oct 1, 2011 22:04:11 GMT -5
Still, yes, Maeve will hurt but this version gives hope, too. For we all know who Sinbad will choose on, don't we? ;D He doesn't dare to choose another woman, or I will kill him by the most painful way I can image. ;D ;D ;D And as for your story: aw, don't feel rushed. I know what it's like to work on a long story. x) But be asured that your summarisation sounds great!! What you wrote is so tender in a way, and somehow even melodic. Thanks, glad you like it. Almost like a poem! I really hope that one day you'll get to finish and translate your story because it definitely sounds promising! I will and, yes, It's a promise. |
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Post by Doubar on Oct 2, 2011 7:28:35 GMT -5
He doesn't dare to choose another woman, or I will kill him by the most painful way I can image. ;D ;D ;D Lol, count me in for that as well! ;D ;D ;D Great! |
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Post by Firouz on Oct 2, 2011 10:29:47 GMT -5
(((HUGS))) Doubar you're the best! AND so are your stories! LOL |
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Post by banmaixanh on Oct 2, 2011 11:35:20 GMT -5
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It's nothing much to say, but hard to find the right words. I just want to talk about my feeling. It's "feeling" so it's maybe different with what the others see or what you really want to talk. However, It's literature not math. Two people can't have the same result.